The wanderer above the mist

Your poem is beautiful! this is one of my favorites!

"Pray I stay to be thus transcribed
by the bleeding of your silky heart,
and pilgrimage that the mist will rise,
before my time comes to depart."

Okay.. those lines... made me shiver and chilled me to my very bones... The flow in this part of your poem... just... seemed to leave me so speechless... I can't think of anything good to say, Colm!

5/5

-Heather

I'm digging the older style of this poem. Generally I wish people would stay away from more "antiquated" word choices and style, because I find they come off tacky unless they're very well done. This was very well done. Is the title related to your avatar picture? "Wanderer Above a Sea of Mist?" I always liked that painting. Well done!

Colm, light house boy:) You made a really beautiful verse here:) I am glad Temps adviced you to change the word, companion sounds so much more mysterious and poetic.

Very well done, glad you came back, hun:)

5/5 Ingrid

I was talking to someone about this the other day...writing poems about writing. I think yours is kinda an exception though.You don't bore us with words pertaining to writing (although you do have a few - pen, muse) Whereas - if someone used creativity, muse, inspiration, pen, thoughts, emotions, ect. I would be cliche rather fast and really dull and boring. But you did a great job here not letting that happen. I can suggest however that it'd be neat though if you could incorporate a metaphor instead of using 'my noble pen' or whatever you said - tie that into the rest of the poem perhaps. Or you don't have to - it's completely up to you. I must compliment you on the title, I liked it, well done.