OMG you burn me with your work.
I love this poem, personally I wouldn't change one thing..perfect ending..the twix in your poem was amazinglyyyy imprressive...

I badly want to nominate this, but I have to wait for next week XD

5/5

Brilliant!

Melissa,

I like this poem.

At first, I didn't like the way you broke up the poem into short lines, but after reading the poem a couple of times I think you did it exactly right. Kudos.

I don't see much value to the commas on lines 2 and 8. Also, I think the semicolon on line 10 should be a comma.

I think you can do better with the title. It is clever, but it also has a self-deprecating implication which seems inappropriate.

I'm curious about your choice of "fume". Are you describing a love/hate thing? You have a subtle moth to flame theme which would be reinforced if you replace fume/come with flutter/fly, but I get the sense that you deliberately went in a different direction with "fume". Maybe if I study the poem longer, I will understand it.

All in all, a great poem.

-TC

A very artistic way of conveying those three words, that have the power to forge a possible continuation. :)

I Love The Way You....Write. haha