Champions of Our Folly

by silvershoes   Jan 7, 2011


Streaming a path through tresses
in rippled banners,
your wheat touches fumble and pull;
they press into cinnabar lips.

Eyes sealed, tongues flickering;
candle lights curse sparks on
ivory pillars.

Shadows your shoulders cast
twine determinedly; they are
iron scarves, but
release enough wherefore
to find my breath
and lose it.

You pump vigor in veins as
our bodies rise to meet
in transcended juxtaposition.

We are luminous creatures
beaming into starlit nights, and
privy to your secrets as you are
privy to mine,
we sometimes curl ourselves in shapes
of Yin and Yang.

It is a youthful love,
and in that it is passionate
and burning
and brilliant.
We are champions of our folly, but
champions all the same.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    I liked this poem a lot for its use of colorful descriptions and also the flow of the poem was very smooth and it didn't break in any part as Nana said. The structure was really good and it kept the poem going from stanza to stanza and line to line. Also the emotions in this piece were very overwhelming and powerful and provoking. Good descriptions and colorful scenes.

    "We are luminous creatures
    beaming into starlit nights, and
    privy to your secrets as you are
    privy to mine,
    we sometimes curl ourselves in shapes
    of Yin and Yang."

    I like this stanza the most and I find it to have a lot of imagery in it and also the emotion in it is powerful from the passion in the lines.

    Overall this was a great poem and though not my type of poem I would normally read I find it to be very emotional. Great job and keep writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Wow..this is brilliant. i love every single detail about this, every single line. Even the things I used to moan about in poems, like these repetitive (ands), that actually in YOUR poem it helped the flow rather than breaking it. It was a flowing poem and Goddddddd
    how sweeeeet , romantic, passionate then how deep your lines went.

    I love this and I wouldn't change a bit about this.
    Although that I find (ying and yang) not appropraite for such a really profound piece. But again I can't find what replaces that, yet serves the meaning at the same time.

    This is a great job with a well, strongly related title. Amazing job..deserves a nomination. But as usual I ran out of nominations ( its past Thursday :P ) I can't wait longer than Tuesday to pick poems as you see , like now I already have yours chosen for next week XD

    Good luck, good job!
    Keep writing.

    eat well sweetheart.
    good health=good poetry.

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