This poem really worked because the rhyming was very subtle. It didn't sound forced.

The lines:
Charged with emotion
Guilt consuming me
Anger at my selfishness
Overthrown by agony

^^^
Good opening stanza because it shows the strong emotions that sets the poem in motion.

The title fits perfectly because it's nice and simple, short, straight to the point.

Hmm, I don't think you should take away the reason why you wrote it. It's on the very bottom om the page, so people read your poem first, and relate. After they read why you wrote this poem, they might understand it even better.

But it's your choice.

I like this one a lot. Great flow

Aure is right. Don't take away the meaning. Why would Britt even write that? It's how people understand and even with out the meaning I would've caught on as this really speaks to me.

I'm feeling great regret for not getting the chance to tell my grandmother how I felt about her before she died and that along with her death is effecting me immensly. This is a brilliant piece Jenna. Short and simple but charged with a lot of emotion. I'm so glad to have you back here with us. You are amazing. Beautiful piece my love.

Danika
xxoxoxx

Sometimes we take people for granted & we
think they are going to be around for a long time we keeps us from telling our true feelings..sorry you had to go through this..take care.

Hey Bella,

I really loved this poem because it is one that I could relate to.

I loved your words, they were very effective.

I really love this part

Picking myself apart
Now there is no chance to explain
You'll never hear the truth
And it fills my heart with pain

This is the part that I can relate to the most. I wish I could have said something before he died.

x