by WonderingSpiritDiaries Jan 14, 2011
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
When girls fall in love, |
by jarrod
I like how you cut straight to the feelings. This way the poem isn't riddled with pointless statements, it simply states what should be adhered to. It was interesting to hear the hidden feelings of a woman, it's not often a man gets to know such things. I'm glad you know how many men can be. Don't give up on them, you just have to be careful and find a good one. As far as the critique goes, if you took a few minutes and changed out words to achieve a streamlined flow of syllables, it would be even better than 5. Good work! |
Wonderfully expressed sentiments from a girls point of view in poetry. Excellent and revealing to a guy. Best of Luck. |
Wonderfully expressed sentiment from a girls point of view in poetry. Excellent and revealing to a guy. Best of Luck. |
by Jad
When girls fall in love |