Comments : My Fault

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Here are my suggestions:

    Sometimes if you separate the poem into stanzas the reader finds it more appealing. So I took the liberty of changing a few things to make it sound smoother and I hope i didn't change the meaning.

    Blast the stereo high for
    I don't want to hear the lies.

    I'm so lost, deep in the dark.

    Confusion loses me.
    who should I believe?
    who should I walk away from?

    Again its my fault
    again my heart shatters.

    School is no escape
    Enemies become friends,
    friends become enemies
    nothing make sense.

    I feel so guilty
    my fault again
    my soul darkens.

    I try to hide, I try to run
    But I keep getting pulled in
    Drama is everywhere
    blood seeps to the floor
    Its my fault, my fault