Comments : Almost Dawn

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    This is inspiring! There is always something new in your poems..and I really adore your style.
    I love everything about this poem..

    the word choice, the originality of your thoughts and the creativity of the emotions that you pull them into some of the most inspiring expressions..

    a very catchy opening and definitely a very well structured ending..

    the one thing I suggest is to take off the ( the) before light/ in your last line

    5/5
    my next week's nomination, for sure

  • 13 years ago

    by The Prince

    Beautiful, Melissa.

    I love how the reader's attention is drawn to this:

    'poem by poem,
    but darling, if your worth bears any amount of glitter, tonight'

    because it's the particular place in the poem in which your abstract imagery tangles with the persona's confessions.

    Adore it ;)

  • 13 years ago

    by Nicko

    You have a unique way of linking your poems together. A very personal write that gives the reader a glimmer of what lies behind