Spring View (Haiku Chain)

by The Queen   Jan 16, 2011


I
vibrant skin of earth
blushing 'neath the perfumed sky -
roses on the bloom

II
folks in high spirits
off over the field with grin -
soft rain falls gently

III
a frog taking break
sits atop a mountain peak -
bench with mirror pond

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Below is an article that provides a brief introduction to writing Haiku. :)

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/haiku/haiku.html

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  • 13 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    I swear I commented on this before, lol. I love haiku's, and I always enjoy a row of them all together. :) Great write, buddy!!! <3 <3 You're awesome.

  • 14 years ago

    by The Queen

    The third Haiku is about a frog sitting in a pond with reflection of a mountain on the water :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Very beautiful imagery which trancends an ordinary natural setting

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I think all your stanzas were well written and gave off great imagery, however I think the first was probably the best and the third was the weakest, I was kind of hoping for something stronger at the end, but truly it's a beautiful nature poem regardless. :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Colm

    I agree that the first stanza is the best. It gives nice imagary with excellent wording. The second two dont add much for me, and seem less natural/original and more ordinary.
    'off over the field with grin' - This doesnt sound quite right, it should be 'a grin' but then it wouldnt fit into the haiku form.

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