Leaving the Fragments

Also on another note -
'broken, shattered, fragmented' - I know this may of been intentional, but I don't see why you need to say the same thing three times, when essentially, they all mean the same thing?

I hate to barge in here and tell you to change anything, however I think you could get rid of some filler words, I would write the poem like this, eliminating the unnecessary words such as 'so, and, the,' etc. -

'Broken, shattered, fragmented,
residing on the edge of nothing yet everything?
Can I wash away this feeling inside?
This pain you've made of me
bleached onto my skin like ink.

I would like to think so, but
dreams are crushed under
the weight of pressure.
Pushed down with sorrow,
cut, scarred into my flesh.

Wipe away the slate of yesterday,
witness my resurrection
from the abuse and lies;
expose me to new found hope,
as I leave the fragments behind.'

^I also added a little punctuation and switched a few things up. Compare this to what you have originally, it's up to you if you wish to make changes, but eliminating filler words will help you immensely!

I loved though, the idea of this poem, leaving the pieces behind, the fragments, moving on to bigger & better things that are worth your time and heart. The ending was great as it opened up some hope. I think with a little editing you could have something great here!

I would like to think so, but
dreams are crushed under
the weight of the pressure.
Pushed down with sorrow,
cut and scarred into my flesh.

This verse just shows and makes the reader
feel the over bearing weight of hurt..a touching write..take care.

It is sad to say that people we love can make us feel this way but they can. The important thing is that we do shake it off, move on. Your words give the reader a glimpse into the thoughts and emotions of this. Well done.

Austin
Such deep emotion in this piece. Nice word choices. I really like the hope in the last stanza.
Good job!
*hugs
Cindy