Sean this poem is really well written, I love the fact of your meter, and i love where you had this rhythm without even meaning to have one

A very dark piece , that left a good impression about your talent

Flesh tares in spiralling shapes,
stained beliefs drop in drips -
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spiralling is with one l ? or 2 ?
no it's one dude..
bagh i donu but
this is seriously a very well penned
opening and i love the spooollyy dark wording of it.
perfecto

this heart has ran out of forgive,

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this is a very sad thought, yet an excellent right..
it's the worst thing in the world, not to be able to forgive others any longer..

love is a pre-boxed program;
lust is caged for this purpose.

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I feel like the poem spoke what's against love..but with reasons,..however despite my disagreement I think you have done a fabulous job

a 5/5

Sometimes said to be my problem, always get off to a good start but finish too early ;).

Thank you, i may return to this later tonight armed with more whisky :)

I think you could possibly add to this piece, but it is in no way necessary, sometimes things get lost in the clutter, I like the raw feel of this piece, you have done a great job, nice work.