The Mistress

I hate to be one of those "great job" people, but honestly I've got nothing to say about it other than it's great. I hate cheaters! Damn cowards.

I like how this mirrors "the wife" poem, although it would have been a stronger like if you'd maybe used the same sort of structure (even though you're going for free-form haha).

The repetition of "the mistress" is really effective and the way you reversed the old cold hands warm heart cliche is pretty cool.

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Very well written. I especially like
"a far different touch
than his wife feels"
It seems to sum up the intent and betrayal. I also like the form you used for this poem. It makes it stand out from the norm. Good Work!

Ooh oooh.... Now u seee...ohh.. *evil grin* ...nowww I know what the wife poem is all about..oh mm mmm..gurl...powerful stufff right here! Ha! Well done.

I liked the first two stanza's alot and enjoyed reading them

"The mistress-
Black veil, red lipstick
diamonds on her neck
Treasured like the queens dowry
Nestled, he holds her
a far different touch
than his wife feels"

^ as for the above I felt it was a typical description of a mistress. I feel you could have been a bit more creative

still overall a good poem

5/5