by Sunshine
Okay since you got it after I explained I will offer this explanation for the rest : |
by Jad
Really incredible this short poem is. You seem to really have gone for imagery in this poem and it is quite easy to see everything you try to describe and also watch all this happen. You seemed to have put emotions of hopelessness in this poem as you bring out your wrath in the verses. The poem itself was short but it went right to the point and I think it was fine just how it was. |
Definitely an interesting write here. I liked the usage of the exclamation point that really added something to the poem & the voice of the writer. Sculpture-in-the-round was unique, I've never heard of that before to describe a dimensional object of some sort. This poem may need some work on the punctuation placing, however, hmm. Your poem would make a lot more sense to me if written like this - |
Now you see....darling this is so weird... Yet so captivating I can't seem to even figure it out...In my prespective..I see at as if you were undressing someone...and you didn't like what you saw... You know:/ am I making any sense? And then it seems like you've uncovered someone to the world to see how twisted and wrong that person is ? Omg this is so abstract...why You play with my mind gurl? ...haha! Anyways I did like it though nice to stumble on something you don't really see often...mwa xox |