Orphaned Poem--for Jad/Austin

Diving through the broken
sentences that cling
^You don't need 'the' here.

that's leaping from your
fragments and adjectives,
into my literal world,
cracked like a semicolon
that's hanging too, at the end
of your lines
^Loved this! Such originality here.

sentiments hang over,
^Try to find a new word here for 'hang' not only does it seem awkward, you just used hanging a few lines above.

A wonderful write, I would have to agree that's kind of what it feels like as you read his sad poetry. What a interesting poem to write about how someone else's poetry makes you feel. I like the idea!

I can read quite a bit between the lines... this is great

Nana, I do believe you have just about broken me down. :] This poem means so much to me and I can't help but be overwhelmed by the impact my poetry has over you. Your emotions coming out of this poem are beautiful and very sad showing how you feel and I am very moved by it. The way you word everything has an impact in the poem and I can't even find one part that I like the best.

I am deeply touch more then anything with this poem as it is about me and I am very honored that you would even do such a thing for my poetry, which I consider to be mediocre at the most. Yet, you seem to find something touching in each one and bring it to life in this poem.

So in all, I would like to thank you for taking your time to write such a beautiful piece of poetry with so much meaning and emotions just for my work. You have blown me away with even the simpliest of a poem. Great job and keep writing! :]