An ingtriguing piece. I liked your use of metaphors and imagery. As I said, I found it to be a very interesting piece, and I think your descriptive language aided that, but I must say, I don't think the piece flowed. Not for me, anyway. It seem to almost get a rhythm, and then fade.

Anyway, it was a piece I am glad to have read. Thank you for sharing it.

Brad

P.S. Please vote and comment honestly on every poem you read.

An ingtriguing piece. I liked your use of metaphors and imagery. As I said, I found it to be a very interesting piece, and I think your descriptive language aided that, but I must say, I don't think the piece flowed. Not for me, anyway. It seem to almost get a rhythm, and then fade.

Anyway, it was a piece I am glad to have read. Thank you for sharing it.

Brad

P.S. Please vote and comment honestly on every poem you read.

An ingtriguing piece. I liked your use of metaphors and imagery. As I said, I found it to be a very interesting piece, and I think your descriptive language aided that, but I must say, I don't think the piece flowed. Not for me, anyway. It seem to almost get a rhythm, and then fade.

Anyway, it was a piece I am glad to have read. Thank you for sharing it.

Brad

P.S. Please vote and comment honestly on every poem you read.