Absurd Obsession

by Sunshine   Feb 3, 2011


Lost in my literal obsession, I pen you down
with absolute hunger to title my new book,
that engulfs pages of white, for all fancy words
stood with humility to praise the way you look.

with sentiments reworded, a new verse begins,
as I plunge my senses deep inside your eyes,
streams of letters escape my lands, sweeping
absurd moments aside, where my roots fear to rise.

Astonished in your reflection, I rephrase all
lines that were poured in, as I stood out,
weary of these leaping beats, that I even
forget to remember who am I writing about!

by: Rania Moallem

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  • 13 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    I so know what you mean and how it feels to be able to express oneself eloquently and poetically, your poem does a good job of describing the emotions of creative writing. What a pity i have not been able to write in more than a year. Well done on an interesting poem. Grant

  • 13 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    I laughed knowingly till I had
    tiny tears in the corners
    of my laughing eyes....

    BRAVO!

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is amazingly deep on many different levels in my book {pun intended} As author I believe most of us can relate to the sentiment behing this poem which you delivered with great skill

  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    Amazing! I haven't read the other comments so I might be repeating a ton of stuff but I have to speak my mind and tell you that I am as Impressed as ever with this stunning piece. Your words completely leave me lost for words and I can't believe how the emotions come out of this piece so easily and are able to touch me. The poem itself was flawless for the most part I believe. The flow went right from line to line, from stanza to stanza without any break whatsoever. The rhyming you used was something else that hit me as wonderful, as I didn't even get the hint of forced rhyming anywhere. You seemed to get the words perfectly placed.

    "Sentiments reworded, a new verse begins,
    the longer I plunge my senses deep inside your eyes,
    streams of letters escape my lands, sweeping
    absurd moments aside, where my roots fear to rise."

    Definitely my favorite part/stanza in this poem. You had a deep passion in this verse and it makes a really good beginning verse. It captivates the reader in the beginning and keeps them along for the entire ride to the end of the poem and leaves them wanting more. I had to reread this poem several times as it touched me so deeply.

    All in all, you have blown my mind out of my head. The poem speaks of many emotions and you seem to stab th reader in the heart and get a good response. Well, you did for me at least. Anyway, like I said I am glad to see that you are growing as a poet and your poems are becoming more meaningful and deeper and lastly more beautiful but sad! Great job and keep writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    One gets wrapped up in the meaning, distracted, and the message escapes in spite of it.
    Unconscious sub-ether channel broadcasts more than you ever intended, and bares your soul to the broadband, giving intimate delicacies to the masses.

    Wonderful

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