You need a period after rise. A period after look. Capitalize astonished.

Other than those few minor things, this is a rather nice poem really, I think I can surely relate to what you're saying. Whether it's an 'obsession' or not, there is always so much we could say about someone, so many words to describe them, yet they are still indescribable. I guess the thing that really turned me off from this poem right away was words such as sentiments, verse, letters, pen, pages, lines, writing - words that pertain to writing, cause essentially you're writing about someone anyways, I don't know, I just don't like words associated with writing anymore, although I know I am probably guilty of using them.. but looking deeper into the poem and forgetting that, you do have a nice poem here, you did a nice job! Remember what I told you, write for you!

The obsession I meant was, in that person where a person will no longer find words to describe them..

andd two..when you write too much about this person..that you almost forget their name

Thanks Silvia for the edition :)

"Sentiments reworded, a new verse begins,
the longer I plunge my senses deep inside your eyes,
streams of letters escape my lands, sweeping
absurd moments aside, where my roots fear to rise."

^^^ I don't know if you did this on purpose, but the rhyming in lines 2 and 4 I liked. -skims down the rest of the poem.- Ah, it looks like you did rhyme on purpose. The opening line got me-- "Sentiments reworded, a new verse begins." Wow, Rania, your way with words amazes me. I also noticed you use "sentiments" a lot in your poems. I'm not condemning you, it's a good thing. The way you use it with your words makes it never get old to me.

"Lost in my literal obsession, I pen you down
with absolute hunger, to title my new book,
that engulfs pages of white, for all fancy words
stood with humility to praise the way you look."

^^^ WOW. WOW. WOW. WOW. WOW. Marvelous!! These words strike me in a place where I did not know could be struck. lol. I love the way it reads. "That engulfs pages of white, for all fancy words" Oh my, oh my, oh my, oh my. I love this line, oh so very much. The imagery in this stanza just speaks to me. And I praise you for using the word "engulfs", I don't know why, but it just stands out to me.

"Astonished in your reflection, I rephrase all
lines that were poured in, as I stood out,
weary of these leaping beats, that I even
forget to remember who am I writing about!"

^^^ Once again, Captain Rania, you never ever ever cease to amaze me. Like I'll always say, I really wish you would have made it longer. Your way with words have me starving for more, yet you keep denying me. "Weary of these leaping beats," That part got to me. I love that part of that line of this stanza, you really chose the perfect words there. It flows magnificently.

I really enjoyed reading this piece, like I do to all of the other pieces I will read in the near by future.
Keep writing, you truly have a gift.
5/5
-Erna

Aww... This is such a unique poem! I really enjoyed it! I love the subject of the poem and how you expressed it... I like to read poetry about someone trying to express themselves through poetry... The ending was funny and unexpected, which is always fun!

Great job hon :)

Wow this like the top grade of poetry
So rich in rear and unseen words
put together so well
you are a great writer!

I'm off to your house,expect me there in an hour or two for my poetry lessons!!!
.... This is Beauty.

One gets wrapped up in the meaning, distracted, and the message escapes in spite of it.
Unconscious sub-ether channel broadcasts more than you ever intended, and bares your soul to the broadband, giving intimate delicacies to the masses.

Wonderful

Amazing! I haven't read the other comments so I might be repeating a ton of stuff but I have to speak my mind and tell you that I am as Impressed as ever with this stunning piece. Your words completely leave me lost for words and I can't believe how the emotions come out of this piece so easily and are able to touch me. The poem itself was flawless for the most part I believe. The flow went right from line to line, from stanza to stanza without any break whatsoever. The rhyming you used was something else that hit me as wonderful, as I didn't even get the hint of forced rhyming anywhere. You seemed to get the words perfectly placed.

"Sentiments reworded, a new verse begins,
the longer I plunge my senses deep inside your eyes,
streams of letters escape my lands, sweeping
absurd moments aside, where my roots fear to rise."

Definitely my favorite part/stanza in this poem. You had a deep passion in this verse and it makes a really good beginning verse. It captivates the reader in the beginning and keeps them along for the entire ride to the end of the poem and leaves them wanting more. I had to reread this poem several times as it touched me so deeply.

All in all, you have blown my mind out of my head. The poem speaks of many emotions and you seem to stab th reader in the heart and get a good response. Well, you did for me at least. Anyway, like I said I am glad to see that you are growing as a poet and your poems are becoming more meaningful and deeper and lastly more beautiful but sad! Great job and keep writing.

This is amazingly deep on many different levels in my book {pun intended} As author I believe most of us can relate to the sentiment behing this poem which you delivered with great skill

I laughed knowingly till I had
tiny tears in the corners
of my laughing eyes....

BRAVO!

I so know what you mean and how it feels to be able to express oneself eloquently and poetically, your poem does a good job of describing the emotions of creative writing. What a pity i have not been able to write in more than a year. Well done on an interesting poem. Grant