Comments : Untogether ...

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    A heartbreaking poem; drenched with emotions.
    ffull of passion and feelings..
    Sad, with so much true emotions, those that many people may stand there and relate to.

    however you can work a bit more on the structure, and when you capitalize each 1st letter you take away from the meaning of the poem; because it distracts the reader.. try to take the capitalization off, from each single letter and see the difference; if you are interested in receiving an edited version shoot me a pm :)

    other than that if this is a true poem, then you should know that it's not the saddest thing in the world..not to be meant for each other..it's to be together and not knowing you are not mean to be,,sometimes we have to get hurt in order to see those who ARE meant for us

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Awww this is a very sad and heartfelt poem... It shows how much you've expressed your emotions through this poem... I like how you're honest in some ways but still remain unsure about your feelings... It makes the poem more interesting... and I thought the last line was so heartbreaking but important to ending the poem in such a way. Well done! :)