by Noel Feb 8, 2011
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
I wish you could see |
This is a poem with heart and emotion. I really like the content and some of the word useage. In parts it feels like you were just trying to complete it. The content becomes predictable. With that said, I think you really have something here especially if you look at it like a rough draft. I would rework this and it could be something special. But, for now it's a 4/5. Strong work with room for improvement. |