Yaki,

Sorry it has taken me a while to leave you a comment, I'm so glad though that I got the chance to read this poem, it is stunning.

I see your poetry improving everyday, not that it hasn't always been gorgeous, it has.. but you've started to use all the important factors of writing in each poem, such as grammar and no slang, that's the only thing I ever disliked in your poetry was when you shortened words ect because your poems hold so much beauty.

This was another poem that grasped by heart, you speak of vulnerability, and these words were vulnerable, raw, feelings that are hard to describe and yet you found a way to describe them. I love the simplicity of the pieces, how you never sugar coat anything, your straight to the core.

A beautiful poem, I adored the first line, it grasped my attention..

-Mel

This is a beautiful poem with very original formating

Beautiful piece Yaki :) It seems you progressed a lot in these few months. Keep it up!

I like the title of your poem that's why i opened it.. and i read the poem. its a totally different way to write a poetry. specially this style...

i like your style....

you know what is the interesting thing in this poem. the title is ' like you better wen u sad' though its love poem...

or one thing this shows to lover that its not i am with you in happiness. its about to live and care and like you in sad time of life as well.

and its all about love... i really liked your piece of working.. and how u all describe your word shows the love and infact deep and true love for you lover..

i always admire these type of writing. style. this is the first time i seen this kind of poetry. it gave me more ideas. that can help me in future as Well..

so keep it up this kind of poetry. thus we can enjoy it...

take care 5/5

---ALONE---