Wow! You really make love sound like a dangerous game.

"In sweet embrace she lay,
bird of paradise, leaving her perfume
to linger, and lessen the stale, bitter taste of dawn."

That is one of the best lines of pure poetry I have read in a very long time. The rest of the poem is good, but that opening line is incredible!!

I definitely loved this poem Ingrid, with all its words, feelings, creativity and most of all flow.
I so much loved it the 1st time you sent it ..like fairytales ..wonderful indeed you have such a way with words that's admirable..

I ran out votes..let's wait for next week XD
5/5
Keep writing hope to see the others soon :)

Ingrid, I loved this! I adored your word choice, you had me wrapped up in the scene and I could feel what was happening. What caught my eye right off the bat was the title because it drew me in and made me curious as to how the poem would be. Great way of using it in the poem. :)

"A princess she was and for her,
he endured all pain lies bring."
^I feel like this sentence needs some editing because it didn't really flow right. I found myself stumbling through it and rereading it a couple of times and still not flying through it. Maybe remove the "and" after was in the first line and add a comma. That might help the flow a bit.

"Woe is he,
who loves a siren with a heart made of stone,
for his arrows will ricochet on her core

indefinitely. "
^Has to be my favorite part of the poem! Left me speechless and wanting more!

Five.

Igrid,

I really enjoyed this poem, when I first began to read it I found that I was reading just a love poem, a beautiful one and that but I wasn't expecting the twist you created towards the end of the poem.

The use of mythology is what really made this poem grasp my attention, the siren is a beautiful yet deadly creature and so it worked quite well with what you are depicting here. It was as though you were saying that love can be dangerous in the way that it can leave pain upon your core.

"Woe is he,
who loves a siren with a heart made of stone,
for his arrows will ricochet on her core

indefinitely."

This is my favorite part, it was unique and not just because of the use of mythology, it was the idea behind it and the emotion it caused while reading.

A lovely poem, thanks for sharing.
-Mel

I really enjoyed this piece Ingrid.

"In sweet embrace she lay,
bird of paradise, leaving her perfume
to linger, and lessen the stale, bitter taste of dawn."

Love the opening and the way you brought the lines together, the 3rd line makes me think of the dawn of realization in the relationship, I like the description you use.

"Woe is he,
who loves a siren with a heart made of stone,
for his arrows will ricochet on her core

indefinitely. "

^Such a beautifully sad ending, though I would use the word "off" instead of "on" after ricochet.

Great work, a very nice write.

Beautiful allusion to mythology, you depicted beyond what I can possibly understand, but of a love united that sometimes will leave those marks- you decide. What a lifting write- pure-complete- deserving of a nomination and more. I will read this again and again, lots of unique visuals and deep feeling.

God bless as always!

Tender felt and serious... a mix of emotions. Almost a story in it's own.

A true poem.

Nice!

You're an amazing poet, and not only do you always inspire me to keep writing, but in reading your poems, I learn so much.

I love the sadness of your words, and how descriptive they are. 5/5

Thank you for sharing!
mandy :)

Very sensual imagery delivering deep free flowing passion

Very Nicely Written, Ingrid. Great Job!!!

A wonderfully written piece, Ingrid; well done.

I have been creeping about your older write....Ingrid you write with such passion it is amazing!

I love this write, it is so warm and tender and so unique, love love love it

X

How on earth did I miss this poem of yours Ingrid?
This is writing at its very best! I loved it!

'A princess she was and for her,
he endured all pain lies bring.
For her he went down on his knees,
begging for one more day in paradise.'

What great lines here. I am in awe of this poem!

This is adorable Ingrid, I missed so much of your great pieces when I was away... You have your way with romance, always tender and elegant and this piece is really an example for this.

Much love :)