Ok
beautiful imagry

however, the technical format for a haiku (as with a senru) is
5 - 7 - 5
your format now is
8 - 9 - 6.

Most of the time we accomplish the sparity of beats by eliminating articles & compressing ideas into ferwer words.
For example:

Snow falls, covers land

Then you develop the theme & put the pathos or irony into the third line to seal the nugget.

Try your rewrite in the format & J think you'll like the outcome

Larry

I agree with Larry..but let me just talk about the wording? AAAAAMAAAAZINGGG>>AMAZINGG!!
I LOVE
IT
SSSSOOOOO
MUUUCHHHH!!

I love how all the members of : Like the flowing river..had absolutely a different idea for the title..
amazing job lizziee

I adore u!
5/5

I love your haiku's, they say such beautiful things with so few words you bring nature to life
Connie