This poem is a dictionary!
my emotions are usually moved when reading such amazing poems that speaks the relations between parents and children..that I realy find it too hard to comment..especially "father/sun--daughter) poems..for they move me badly..and
this just was so warm..and reflected a very beautiful relation..that shows how a father is usually his son's hero..and best model..

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this :

Years since he spoke his last smokey breath - stroked,
I vividly remember his stories and cherish every one:
mosaic shells one encasing another, like a Russian doll,
at the center a lively man dancing words with his audience.

^^
was very touchy..
5/5

This is an interesting story, although I don't think I would classify it as "poetry."

I think there is at least one good poem in this, but it would need some work to pull it out.