The first three quarters of this piece were very pacey due to the shortness of the lines, and it really felt like something was building and getting more intense. More so because of the structure you've chosen, where there are not breaks. I liked it.

There's not much I can say that I've not said in previous comments. This piece felt every personal, emotional and intense. It was, as with everything I read by you so far, well written and powerful.

I'd like to thank you. I was beginning to think it was pointless coming on this site, because (and I do feel bad saying this) I wasn't enjoying any of the work. But then, I found you, and now I feel much better, so thank you.

Brad

P.S. As always, please comment and vote honestly on every poem that you read.