This has a very religious feel to it, but isn't stuffy or overly preachy like a lot of religious poetry can sometimes get.

There's too many great lines to start naming them, but suffice it to say, this is a very nice write. I can really feel the emotion in it. :)

A lovely write, nice use of words and I like what it was about. You have a few really beautiful lines in this and I especially like the wording. Makes me wish that I had more an imagination. A really touching piece. I really enjoyed it.

Much love,
Danika

Wow where do I start?!?

Your soul defeats pain,
not replacing it with artificial love,
but conquering all that was deemed
unsinkable

^ This was just absolutely powerful to me! I think it was due to your use of conquer! by far my favorite lines of this piece!

Please, my truest love,
do not summon me
in the liquid passageways
of earth's tears.

^^ WOW..then I got to this part....and changed by mind...THIS was my favorite lines by far...I was blown away at the beginning of the poem, then blown away with these words.

Your beginning and ending were great, I just wouldn't change a thing! I honestly would rate this more than a 5 if I could and I don't say that often!
Chelsey

Ow wow, MaryAnne:)

The title is great, wording is truly magnificent and I just love how this is so strong and mature..you are growing up fast, little lady:)

Please, my truest love,
do not summon me
in the liquid passageways
of earth's tears.
When I call,
I want to feel you
by my side,
through untouched sky.
^^

Favorite part, so beautifully put!

Well done!

5/5 Ingrid