Hmm... I had the feeling like you aimed to rhyme, but there were some parts where it didn't.

my advice would be to either focus on the rhyme scheme or to make this piece fully free style so that way it won't hold you back.

Though, I do have to say that I agree with the content. Love starts growing slowly then it grows. Not many finds True love and thus we end up wishing to find it.

Your thoughts are wonderful... It felt like you know the skin of true love and your words, the thoughts that developed this piece reflects your beauty of writing... I loved this one the most...^^
Excellent piece:)

Nice!! I disagree with everlasting and thought the rhymes were perfectly fine!! Love it!!