What I enjoy about your writing is the effortless flow and rhymes. I also want to say how it feels so genuine, but knowing that it's real, and after you having put that caption at the end, I don't really feel great about praising that aspect.

I do think a couple of the lines could've been extended, like 'I have to leave' and 'I'll understand'.

Brad

Every painful moment is neatly etched within this poem. Every word so simple and yet still reflects the choice you've decided to make. This is an amazing piece - sad and painful.

It's a shame I don't have a copy of the former version to compare it with, but I do believe it flowed even better due to the length of the lines, which in turn, strengthens the message.

Brad

P.S. Please comment and vote HONESTLY on every poem you read.