Fall of Dusk

The first haiku is excellent, it says so much. I like how 'dripping blood,' symbolises dying/decay.

betrayed by Summer
^^
Nice wording, it personifies Summer, gives the reader an interesting image. Also, by placeing the blame on Summer, one can get a meaning that perhaps the good times of Summer itself was the cause for the decay now. It brought to mind both the phrase 'all good things come to an end' and the current economic recession in this regard.

I think the first haiku stands on its own, although the other two depict quite good images I dont think they really add much, as most things of importance have already been said in the first haiku. That being said overall it was an interesting read and it was nice to read a visually rich poem. Nice alliteration was used also. The only thing is I probably wouldnt put the comma after abandoned as I dont think it's needed. Overall though well done!
Colm

Lulu! This is, perfection. I know as well as anyone how hard it is to paint a clear picture in as little as 51 syllables.

If you can get someone like me, a guy in the Pacific North West that is surrounded by coniferous trees, picturing a deciduous forest; then you have done your job!

I just picture a hill laden landscape covered in thousands upon thousands of maple trees, in that window of time in the middle of October. Frost on the ground and a crispness in the air.

So few words yet so much imagery, it's almost overwhelming (but in a good way).

"Abandoned, by warmth
Autumn dusk brings certain death
and lifeless they fall"

I agree with Temps that the comma is not necessarily needed. It does disrupt the flow just a tad, but I can see that if you were reciting this why you would have a slight pause there.

Excellent work! +5

This is the best string of Haiku's I have read in a long time. The description is vivid and paints a beautiful image to my mind. I loved the complimenting colour scheme you used, if it's one thing we've been taught in art it's that colour has a strong symbolic meaning, complimenting is a passion, contrasting can form a colder effect. I think you depicted the warmth of fire beautifully.

I loved the image of forests being betrayed by summer, I adored it actually. I mean it's something I haven't thought of and can have many representations. For me I picture bush fires because they're common here, I do however know that you could of been just representing the autumn colours but for me it held more.

This is a lovely poem Lu! A gorgeous piece.
-Mel

Through the eyes of the artist( poet!) nature is always beautiful and worthy of praise, like you have done here.

I love how you worded the falling of the leaves: dripping blood(the red and yellow leaves)...and how it all seems to die..only to be born again:)

Well done, crazy chickie:0)

5/5 Ingrid

I've always read your nature poems Lu and said the same thing over and over..your nature poems are the only ones I read..They come out beautiful and the imagery, like Temps said, is so clear!
I loved this!