Werewolf Turning

by Jack Nightengale   Mar 8, 2011


My skin starts to burn,
Blood and meat are what I yearn.
Pain and pleasure is what I feel,
As fur covers my body and my skin starts to peel.
The moon is full yet once again,
With enhanced hearing I can hear the drop of a pen.

My body grows as claws and fangs start to grow,
In the mirror I stare at piercing eye with a yellow glow.
It's clear to me that the monster has been revealed,
I must make my escape, somewhere out in the field.

At the sight of the moon I let out a deadly howl,
Now the whole town is out on the prowl.
Running away to find others to start learning,
This was just the beginning of my Werewolf Turning.

To be continued........

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  • 13 years ago

    by Sparkling snow flake

    I like the way you express it. Love the imagery. so detailed! Good job Kris!

  • 13 years ago

    by Lost Innocence

    Cool..kind of strange but i liked it any ways:D good job Kris

  • 13 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I have to disagree with the previous comment. When I first read it, I dind't like it, then, after reading the comment made before, I re-read it, and felt this piece has the potential to be 'wow', but it isn't there yet.

    I liked the first stanza, with the stucture and flow you adopted, but then it changes in the second and third stanzas. I feel the first structure is the one to stay with.

    I dind't like the use of the word 'grow' twice in the line 'My body grows as claws and fangs start to grow'. I think if the first 'grow' was changed to enother word, it would make that line stronger and cleaner.

    I think in general if you give the piece a little more depth in it's content, and a little more flavour in it's wording it'll feel much stronger.

    Brad

    P.S. Please comment and vote HONESTLY on every poem that you read.

  • 13 years ago

    by Shellaine shelli

    Oh my goodness, I am at a loss for words!! It was such an exciting poem to read, I was so interested in what happens next. Seriously WOW, I honestly don't have enough words in my vocabulary to explain how much I loved this poem. It was so descriptive and I could see the "turning" in my mind. I absolutely loved the details and picture you painted with the words. I picked up one thing though and I'm not sure if its meant to be like that or if it was the tiniest mistake but where it says: “
    In the mirror I stare at piercing eye with a yellow glow” I thought it would sound more cortrect if it was "eyes" instead of just singular eye? Or it could just be me. But over all excellent job as always, I LOVED it and still think this site needs a higher rating than 5!!!!

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