I really enjoyed this, especially the stanza:

"Men lie lonely,
On humbled streets,
Tucked in tightly,
To cardboard sheets,"

I have to admit, though, that the ending was a tad disappointing. With a poem this well-written and thought-provoking, it deserves a more powerful ending.

I really enjoyed this poem =)
The flow was perfect and the rhyming was consistent!
Also the imagery you created was both simplistic and entrancing.

I liked this poem, you painted a picture and at first I wasn't sure where you were going to go with this.

After about the cardboard box line I was starting to get it. You're very good at subtle hints in the poems you write.

thank you for the comment and I always vote accordingly. I may write poem off emotion but base judgement off logic.

Warm Regards,
Shaun

A really enjoyable piece with great rhyming.

Hi,

the rhythm and rhymes are perfectly fit in every lines.

very words are rolling into my tongue. .. nice piece. ..5/5 for this.

Gel

This has really great rhyming and flowed like water. An enjoyable read, relatable too.