Acquiescence

Comments from Hellon aka Miss Take ( F C D ) at 2011-03-21:
I think there is a hidden meaning in this verse and, if I'm corrert it will be lost to most but...not all. Perhaps I'm really just reading to much into it.

I agree and the way i perceive it may or may not be correct:
" I nest on a quilt of diamondbacks.
There are worse things than
trepidation"
"Swaying in suspension,
self deprecation trickles into the frame"
"...instinctive struggle to continue on
existing."

These phrases seem to reflect a deep sadness over some events, but the last 2 stanza's seem to show the resilience and the inner strength to withstand the worst.
Congratulations on an outstanding poetry!

For the late comment, I shall be sorry, but already voted long ago:P as once upon a time lol..so back to the piece, 1st off, I love the title, and loved it more when it became word of the day.

the opening lines and the closing ones were very strong, as much as your body, which takes this poem to the book of perfection, which we seldom see nowadays, poets now either concentrate on a strong opening or closing stanzas..so i give u credit for that.

the word choice was very strong, and so was the flow.

Flecked across a scorched plain
in Death Valley,

^ found this to be very catchy..

I nest on a quilt of diamondbacks.
^
u nest on ? I was taken away by your wording Ms. silver, it was veyr creative..u see simple things matter the most

this was my favorite part:

I am a starved wretch contrasting against
rich landscapes of cacti, aloe,
and spattered desert willows with pale
indigo blooms.
^
because i really lvoed each single word, and most of them were words hat usually inspire me, especially starve cause i am starving now and am thinking of double macchciken :)m mhm u can come over. anyway back to topic thhe desert willows with pale.. was very creative, you have a mind of a real poet

the closing stanza was effective, and the line before this that u left alone, had a good impact standing -alone.

I will have a window in time to
obliterate its unhinged jaw
and escape.

^
very powerful..but i already mentioned that, so keep writing
ofcourse 5, and those who down voted the poem, gave u credit i believe LOL :)

Congrats- many hands and hats off to you!

Keep it up- you deserved it :)

God's blessings..

I've been wondering about the parentheses as well, Hellon. I think maybe I should take them out since they're borderline ostentatious... oi. Thanks for the comment :)

This was incredible, the flow stood out by itself and your word choice did wonders- creating an army of imagery that held their own meaning and flowed into a greater sense of thinking, this sudden hope at the end where you fall from death's clutch. A lot to think about- your thoughts are clear and proud here.

Please keep writing, this sounds so amazing and truly mind-blowing when read aloud, lots of colors to shout out! It's been a bit since I read from your poetry, thanks for sharing!

God bless foreva!