Change Your Dream

by Thomas   Mar 14, 2011


Whisper something in my ear or act out something creative to see,
Close your eyes and wish for something; another place to be,
Place your foot down in the sand; then find your way to the water,
Or imagine life in years from now, with your first son or daughter,

Dream of special places, then dream that you were not there alone,
Imagine your first day of school- and see how much you have grown,
I dream of going to the moon, or sailing around this peaceful earth,
I imagine that I'm so powerful- that in this world I have a worth,

I dream about my loved ones, my Nan and Grandad together again,
I wish i had a paint brush- that i can draw the past years from plain,
Sometimes I dream that I am a doctor; a special power that is to cure,
Someone who can take a love so tainted and make it a love so pure,

In dreams I can be everything, I dream that my power was to fly,
I could skip all of life's problems, just by just soaring through the sky,
I dream that I am a bird and from my height that you could see,
A thousand flowers on the ground- but in my dreams; they resemble me,

If I had one wish tonight, then I'd pray that my dreams could come real,
I wish I had the power to love; I wish that I had the power to heal,
There is not one thing that I'd wish more, than for everyone to feel free,
I wish that everyone could see; that there are no chains holding me,

If I had to dream within a box; filled of things which I can do today,
I'd call everyone in my phone; telling them that I love in every way,
I can't be there always for everyone, but I'd dream to have the speed,
I'd dream to have the knowledge, to say the right words that they need,

lay down with me tonight and when we both rest our tired heads,
I pray that I'm in your dreams; where we can tie all lose threads,
You can dream of anything- something that never you thought to be real
One thing you gain from reality, is the question just how does it feel?'

Place your hand down on the beach and draw a hand full of sand,
Tell me how does it feel- when it slips through the palm of your hand?
Use your finger on the soft, smooth, sand- then draw what you want to be,
Wait until the tide comes in- and let your dreams get eaten by the sea.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Thomas,

    This is beautiful and full of emotion that you cam truly feel.

    Em

  • 13 years ago

    by Thomas

    Many thanks for your comments, sorry I've been away for a little while writing a new one :) I'll try take this on board, one of my weaknesses is the length! I rarely write poems about/for actual people, but this one was written for someone- so the emotion that I hope came across is real :)
    Is there a specific poem that you would like me to comment on? :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Wow!! I really really enjoyed this poem...lady Nik totally took my comment. I think some filler words could go that could make the syllable count a little better which helps with the flow..

    But the over all poem was very nice! The fact that you tell her to dream of whatever you want and you'll dream that you can love and help as many people as possible and all that cutesy stuff was really adorable to me...

    Your descriptions were very nicely written as well!

  • 13 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I think this is a very lovely poem. One problem and I'm sure you guessed it. The length. When you have a poem as long as your every word needs to be there. Every word needs to evoke some kind of emotion out of the reader. I think you had a lot of filler words that can be easily removed. It was very verbose which I think takes away from what's most important about this piece, the emotion. If I were you I'd drop the ryhme, use some shorter syntax and a little less filler words and this poem would be even more beauitful than it is now. Great imagery and diction. I can tell this came from the heart. Thanks for sharing. -Nik

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