Wow, this was absolutely brilliant! You've painted the picture of this girl perfectly. I can definitely see her beauty through your words. I like the flow, how it started off pretty smooth, but got kinda jumpy in a sense, when you were completely fixated on her. I'm surprised that this hasn't gotten more comments or votes. Well, I thought this was brilliant. Much enjoyed!
Take care

I love this.
So beautiful and written amazingly. :)
5/5