Crimson Love

Such a heartfelt poem, i love the description, works beautifully with the emotions i felt, while reading this, take care xx

....ya even i v two younger brothers in d armed forces n i can feel d pain n feelings here..... nyc one again... keep it up

....ya even i v two younger brothers in d armed forces n i can feel d pain n feelings here..... nyc one again... keep it up

....ya even i v two younger brothers in d armed forces n i can feel d pain n feelings here..... nyc one again... keep it up

The feelings you poured in this poem, can make a master piece,
how amazing the description was..
fantastic piece of art with endlesssss flow...
I was fond of the whole piecee...
perfect piece, and the only things I can suggest is to play with the upper case and punctuation, so I tried edit it ...hope u agree :

I stand alone in life, because
I'm the one that no one can save,

as I gaze into the horizon,
listening to the rhythm of waves...

So slient in here, since you are
serving side by side with the braves.

Aching with every breath I take,
this is how my heart now behaves.

And you, have to know that
my heart in your love; a slave

^
changed to into "in" and took off is, cause with a semicolon it's not needed.

So I will lay down on the shore,
holding the picture you once gave.

^^
added the word once..better for the flow :)

As the crimson tide drown me in,
my tortured soul gradually-caves.

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Well chech the periods and commas, and hyphen I added, and i took of some upper case, cause i think it makes the poem more attractive, if you disagree when u compare then no worries, but in all i think you woote a heartfelt poem, just an amazing piece that touches everyone who has someone serving in the army

5/5