Comments : Distant Belongings (Collab)

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Was my pleasure writing this with u, a poem that we both relate to its events, thanks for your speed as well.

    looking forward for another
    5/5 for your verses

  • 13 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow! This is such a beautiful poem... I loved the story you told, and it was definitely a very good collaboration, well done! I enjoyed the structure as well, I think it was perfect for this poem.

    My favorite part was the second half:

    "Bare, I surrender my thoughts to the sea
    hoping I'll evermore be free.

    (but)

    rain visits and leaves, loading my heart, my soul,
    with memories of you-
    that I barely recognize to recall.

    For I, the second stranger,
    rests on the edges of your door, tapping pitifully once a day,
    wondering if it's you who once breathed there,
    and at times I have to admit,

    I do not distinguish anymore."

    Amazing! Great job to both of you :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    What an amazing piece of work .. Its a perfect collab between you and Ms Sunshine ..

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is so amazing ..you two work so well together... outstanding 5>>>>>>>>>>>