Indirect Wishes

You must of penned my mind down, how nice of you! Seriously, It may not be the best poem you've written or anything but the emotion is definitely there and when I can so easily relate to words, it hits me so hard and I love that feeling. I feel it's important to be able to really connect with a poet's mind, and I had no trouble doing so here.

AMAZING :)!

I love your imagination here, and I love
the words you chose,and the style of wording your expressions, its very interesting to see how you eeven tried to reflect the way u are feeling deep inside.

great opening stanza:
it was a very sad opening and a very very
relatable one, its perfect the way it is,
and I would suggest you to add a comma after
drifting, sounded like apause was essential..
and if you dont mind I would eliminate some words a little.. compare them, if you disagree then no harm.. XD

It's like I'm drifting
you don't even pass me by,
I am standing by your side
and yet you welcome me with
ignored silence.

It's like I'm drifting,
you-don't even pass me by,
though I'm standing next to your side,
yet you welcome me with silence
that's heaved with ignorance.

^
both cases its just a wonderful openning, that even makes u so sad to think being ignored by the person who we are giving our best. I like!

My heart I want to dissipate,
toss into the abyss,

^
very strong emotionally, and the extremes
of taking a stand.. very touchable

such angelic expectations
for what headaches?

^^ if you mean for what, head aches..then u need to write it the way i just did.. or else there is a problem with the headaches word...the sentence aint right if you check :) but I got the meaning, and id say congratulations for your imagination!

Wandering far and there you are(add a comma)
a hand away, a touch so close
and you fall away.

^^^
and what to say for u about this? wonderful flow, amazing feeling, and I could just see it there infront of me and feel the harsh feeling of that moment..how they come and leave so swiftly before we even enjoy hving them beside us.
amazing ..wonderful!

I thought you knew me for this long
and I am still holding on,
with no wings able to take flight.

^^
you dont need able here, you can say
with no wings to lift me away ? or
with no wings to take flight
just able didnt sound needed and the flow was better without it, but anyway the part is amazng, and i really enjoy relating to your work..all the time!
SAD

How can brokenness of nothing
hurt this bad?

^
perfect question, and touched me to my roots.

Puncture a wound
unanswered and untamed?

^
puncture was of a wonderful usage!
amazing word choice, cant be more perfect

I want to crush this world,
shake it to pieces,
if only for a whisper
from your heart.

^^
omg the power of your words over here, the anger, and the longings are damnn too obvious,
very heartfelt how u just wanna do the impossible to get that..perfect!
hands up
wonderful poem..

keep writing this is just a masterpiece

5/5