I love the simplicity of this piece, your words reach great depth. It's sad how some people can just play with the heart's emotion. I loved the ending truly, and I can say that I believe it. Love is hard work, and if you're willing to work at it with your partner..forever could happen.
Another brilliant piece!

Forever doesn't last most of the time even if we do try to prove them wrong. Full of emotion and feelings of being anxious about how a love makes us feel and how we want it to be and last.

I respect the fact that you can take your heart break and turn it into something beautiful. Every time I try to write about how getting your heart broken feels, I just end up spilling my mess of a heart on the page. I respect how you can explain that feeling into creative and true words that flow like a river.

Once again you capture life and put it into words and also you find happiness with this subject when others would find despair, hate, and regret. Your poem speaks of the opposite side of all that and embraces the topic with love and hope. Your emotions in this poem are outstanding and as someone else already said, this piece is so simplistic that I'm sure many could read this poem and be moved deeply by it. Also you had some good imagery in parts which made the poem vivid to where I could see things happening around me. Very nice touch.

"They say forever won't last...
time will break and it just won't pass
on into eternity. I want this love to be true.
To exist as the world does, but I'm
only a dreamer. I need to be free from the
magical passion that has been stuck inside me.
Burned to an abnormal tint of yellow reflects the
lust I have for you. For us."

This had to be my favorite part and I found it to be a good, strong first stanza. Your words speak powerfully and yet gentle enough to be grasped and your emotion pours out in the first stanza, grabbing the readers attention. Your story of how you portray this is also neat and written clearly and effectively.

All in all, you did a wonderful job and I find this to be a beautiful poem that describes ones emotions really well and I find that even with the task of having to use certain words, you did a great job and got a strong story across that is simply wonderful. Great job and keep writing!