Howls of blood lust from both sides at play
out-sing a mouth with no voice to wail
a fragile being strives to never fray

*This was my favorite part :] the imagery here was very well penned. I don't have the mental capacity for poems like this lol but I have nailed this one. Very well done. :] -Nik*

Good job on the form :)

As the title says, the poem is about " The Wilting FLower", the description of the flower was well executed. Hmm, a new member, you seem to have a natural talent. :)

Welcome aboard!

Wow... First great job on writing this type of poem... I know how hard it can be to stick to a certain structure and rhyme scheme. I really enjoyed this poem and loved the repetition, it gave great emphasis on the dark, raw emotions.

This was my favorite stanza:

"Sky falls dark, clouds inhale powder and decay
one after another hearts fall cold and stale
a fragile being strives to never fray"

Well done!

Amazing piece again,
this blew me away, I love this form
(no neveer tried it)

depth, wording, meaning and flow,
good rhythm.

Well done
5/5

It's nice to see someone attempting a form here, and a Villanelle is one of the most difficult. Much of the language you use is very nice.

Well done, poet!

I love the form and you wrote it with a velvet flow. Your wording touched hands and complimented one another. Excellent work

This poem was amazing!! I loved the whole poem but also you made it a very touching poem and stuck to the type of poem you were writing, which seems to be a difficult format. I thought this was absolutely brilliant!! :)

Okay so first things first, WOW!!!! Theres some really talented writers on this site and its always wonderful to see the different styles, topics, images etc... that people use. Whilst this truly was such a sad piece the way you put the words together portrayed a beautiful tragedy. (the beauty coming through your choice of words)

It was so discriptive and captivating from start to end. AMAZING job:)

So after reading your 'destination 21' piece. I was rather curious about other pieces of your work because I like your style of writing and came across this one...

Firstly, I would like to thank you for introducing me to this form and writing a footnote.

Secondly, I really enjoyed he rhyming even though that's kind of the rules for the piece lol but what I mean is because you do it so smoothly and without forcing the rhymes out. I also, like the repetition because he message is repeated in a way that sticks like glue.

Well done on yet another fab piece,
Em