Extra Mile (collab with Rabea)

This was a beautiful piece :] Not my favorite from you too but still a touching piece none the less. I felt the emotional content was very strong something a lot of people can relate to. I hope you two keep writing great poetry both together and alone. You'll always have a reader with me :] thanks for sharing. -Nik

This was a very sweet poem and the emotions come pouring off the lines and it is so easy to get overtaken by them. Y'alls words are very sincere and you indeed do speak softly as someone has already mentioned and the poem has a very strong message embedded into it. The poem itself flowed smoothly and the transition from who wrote what is fantastic and I can't really tell myself who wrote what. The stricture was really good as well and went right along with the flow.

"For the reason I survive, rests
in your touch, and revives in
your memory,
for at the back of my mind,
you've build a habitat
to haunt me every day,
so that my everything
became you,
and you became everything I am."

This was my favorite stanza and I find that repetition of part of the first stanza in this really good and powerful. I like the repetivness of it and I find it does not take away from the poem. I also like how y'all describe everything. Gives me a good idea of what i going on and I can picture everything in my head while I read.

In all, you two did a great job and this poem really shows the talent you both have. I find it very unique how the poem was smooth in its message and emotions though it was done by two people. Anyway, I would lastly like to say that this is a very heart filled poem that really grabs the readers attention in the beginning and keeps it till the end. Great job and keep writing!

Sometimes a poem says so much that commenting and critiquing it would only take away from that poem. This is one of those times. This piece moved me in so many ways that it has made me speechless.

"If only it meant, you'd be with me"

Heartbreaking but beautiful. This was a gorgeous piece.