Heartbeat

One word. . . Excellent!
I can feel your pain through your words and i believe you to be a very strong man..very strong indeed.

Yeah...our life beats and we know we have to go on...even that is not in our hands. A sad write of longing and pain...take care.

A simple poem that describes one love for someone and how they left. I have seen many poems like this and it becomes very cliched but you did a great job getting your emotions out and that is what we aim for in poetry most of the time so what you have done is fine. :]Your poured your heart out and what more can you do. A story that many can relate to and put their feelings into.

In all, you did a great job venting out your heart and the emotions inside and it is nice to see a positive attitude in this situation when many would be sad and be down. Great job and keep writing!

Nice work on this. A good message that even though your heart is broken or hurt by this love, you found a way to accept and deal with that pain. Your heart is healing and you are dealing with the memories but open to loving another in the future.

I'm with Nitin. A simple piece but full of true emotions. I could really relate to this piece a lot. Hope to see more from you hun :] -Nik