I like the beginning and end of this piece, I don't mind the repetition, it's the telling part that changed its meaning. I think you should try to show us love, care, cry for them... describe a scene where you show those feelings for them.. like; I hug them as they pour out the anguish of their hearts to me and smile with care as my heart rips for their pain.

Really cool mom poem

Thks i really love writting poems that have nothing on me but people around me