Burning in the Skies

Nuclear, chemical, Atomic-
Blinds eyes to the real source of pain
that pulses through our kid's last breath
as their eyes are burned into their skull

^^ As creepy as that can sound, thats incredibly true and I totally agree!!

So let the rich play their games
as the poor suffer the consequences,
losing all that has been found and
gaining nothing but an empty world.

^^I was just talking with my mom about this today and how sad this concept is...its just ruining are nation :(

This poem is such a reality check for people and I wish more could read and comprehend what you are trying to say. Loved the title, loved where you went with this piece, I thought it was great!
Chels

Austin
Very deep and thought provoking piece. Great imagery letting the reader visualize what you are seeing. It is sad what is happening in the world today. Makes me sad to think what will be here when my grand babies are grown.
Great job!
Love Cindy

The poor does pay the price for mankind. But the rich have a choice . I won't get into the tech. ideas that run through my head.
Let me just say, I think your writing is fantastic as your thoughts are filled with clarity of life and it's surroundings.

Dramatizing nations,
^Are you sure you didn't mean to say 'traumatizing' I feel that may fit better.

let the rich play their games
as the poor suffer the consequences,
^Kind of liked this part, just really held a lot of power.

Ending is powerful as well, ends on a solid note. You wrapped it up very nicely, also bringing the title into the poem as well. Nicely done

Yes that is what that will eventually happen
leaving a barren world for our children if the
future survives with children. A heart rendering write..