Insoluble Influences

by Sunshine   Apr 23, 2011


Supposed to bed under Sad poems, but ya nature.

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There bursts a gust under my skin,
it chills me out with its frosty moans
inhabiting my core
as I endure Winter to let go of Fall.

For cold has been following me-
it drivels and wheezes, like a bully
awaiting each sheet to tremble
with my nerves.

Still, more showers pouring with insanity
cruelly hauling me into the petals flirting
at the gates of April; mad for Spring.

With curious plans in pitiful eager for
Summer, to sweat wretchedness in
cheery covers..

Alas-right now, the world is foreseeing
harsher frosts, but I urge not to ice up
as Nature has this manner in the power
of its snappy air,
to rupture all that isn't her own
although we are all...hers.

by: Rania Moallem

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  • 13 years ago

    by Britt

    What do you comment when there is so much to say, but you've been pushed into a sense of speechlessness?

    I truly don't know what to say here. This piece is beautiful, and it has so many different facets of life, truth, love, wisdom, sadness, anger, hurt, pain, beauty. My gosh this is an emotional rollercoaster of a piece for me, without a doubt.

    Such strong imagery painted with the petals flirting at the gates of April - I LOVE that line, and wow wow wow what a strong idea. I love the bit about the world foreseeing harsher frosts as well, this could definitely be taken more than one(or two) ways, but to take it at face value brings a beautiful picture. To take it as a metaphor it brings me such sadness to know and hear of the destruction consistently happening.

    This is a very deep piece, Nana. Gorgeous!

  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    First off, I am sorry I haven't commented on your poetry in like forever. I had a long writers block and was trying to get through it. Second, I am glad to see you have not lost your touch at all. This piece however is different from what I am used to reading but I am glad to see you looking at things from a brighter side and also stepping out of your comfort zone in which people like to write. Anyway, your poem was really refreshing and goes right along with the changing of the season right now. The imagery was really good and the poem flowed from stanza to stanza.

    "Still, more showers pouring with insanity
    cruelly hauling me into the petals flirting
    at the gates of April; mad for Spring."

    This was my favorite stanza and it really gave me great visualizes as I could almost see a flower wanting to open up but hesitant of the cold but crazy for the promise of coming warmth. You were very descriptive in these lines and it really adds to your poem. I also like how you use the times of the year and the months as actually beings in this poem. Very creative.

    All in all, you have done a wonderful job with this poem and though it is not as strong as some of your others I was still not disappointed. Your words carried emotions of sadness, love, wanting, and even impatience and your words brought this poem to life and painted a picture for me to read. Great job and keep writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jeff Weiner

    I see anger, love, and a lost soul comfortable in the thought of knowing the earth will protect us.

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