Comments : With Patience I Will Find Love

  • 13 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    You have no idea how many people I meet in between relationships. You have at least analysed your own situation very well.

    Good Poem

    Sitting around collecting my thoughts
    wondering how my life got here,
    Single and not knowing why
    wishing the answer would come clear,
    ^^^ Posting works like 'Evil Goes Home' can't help out!
    - (JK - I liked that poem also)

    So many failed attempts with love
    but still willing to try once more,
    Believing my princess is out there
    watching through an open door,
    ^^^ You are one of the few poets on this site that pays attention to beat & measure. I think that helps.

    The crystal ball we call faith
    ^^^ I like this!

    guides us towards a love near,
    ^^^ but this line seems awkward; the syntax is beyond comfort level

    An open heart in darkness
    carries us past fear,
    ^^^ these lines are powerful: keeping a heart open in the darkness - what a great image

    This hopeless romantic
    ^^^ Maybe something fresher?

    My thoughts are now collected
    as clarity fills my heart,
    Patience is the greatest virtue
    now I can make a fresh start
    ^^^a poem with a drawn conclusion!
    Also rare. I salute you, sir.

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Sharon Brook

    An aewsome read, love it alot, i can relate to what you are saying about looking for love. The thing is ,we shouldnt look as it will come to us when we least expect it to.... Well I'm hoping so