Versus The World: Part 2 [free write]

Ahhh...the sadness of love and the longing
for that one who lifts you up and gets you
going is no more by your side..this is life and
this is love..beautifully penned!

Ben
What a twist from part 1.....you really did put a turn on your words and the 2 different situations.
Good job!

I think you are using this part to show a completely different side to the story in your first part. This one gives the negative side of everything. You talk about how you now have gained everything but have lost this person and that without them you can no longer stand and keep trying. Your words are easy to understand you are very clear with what you are trying to communicate. The sadness in this poem is felt and I feel as if there might be some hope at the end of this one for this person to come back.

All in all, you have done a good job showing the other end of the spectrum of your story. The first part was about being content while you have nothing and this part deals with an emptiness even while you have everything. Very creative and unique. Great job and keep writing.

Yes it will pass, just read part 1 and use that hope to continue each day.