What a wonderful Tanka Sylvia :) I can feel the sun and hear the sounds of nature.
Great job!
Love Cindy

What a lovely imagery ... sounds so relaxing :)
beautifully written.

What a lovely imagery ... sounds so relaxing :)
beautifully written.

I can picture you sitting on your chair with a
sunny smile enjoying the tranquility..nice
tanaka!

I can picture you sitting on your chair with a
sunny smile enjoying the tranquility..nice
tanaka!

Me likes!!!! :] You have written a very beautiful Tanka and I am glad to see that you wrote it using all the guidelines. Many people think you can change certain guidelines because of whatever reasons and I am glad you sticked to it. :] The imagery is very beautiful and I can easily see everything. This is such a relaxing piece and lets my mind just calm itself and is put in a state of relaxation.

All in all, I really like this poem and though you have this poem in the poems about life section I still find it has a great deal of nature in it and it is very beautiful. You have a wonderful talent and I am glad to see you using it and I hope to see you use it in the future. Great job and keep writing!

Describing paradise in such short form, made me smile with great memories:)

This is so peaceful . I could get lost in such a wonderful place.
Connie