"So I will not leave this cave any soon;"

The use of soon really confuses me. I would either make it any sooner (and then add another line) or take out "any". YEAH! Take out any..."I will not leave this cave soon" if you want to keep the soon in there :)

I love this poem, and am so glad you did so well with the title! Just so you know, this is a Carole King title lol

I adore the use of "aquatic core" and the way you brought once again the shores/waves/water. I love the "skeleton ships" as well. Thought that was very clever here! :)

That beginning stanza just says it all for me. It's beautiful and sad, but has such a great opening and leads into such an amazing story! I love this! :)

I am very impressed with this poem and the imagery you use to describe your emotions was really good. I could picture the sea and all the other things you described with it when you tell your message in this poem. I also like how you keep such a watchful and restrictive emotion in this piece as to not let yourself not be hurt by this person anymore or give them another try.

"I possibly will no longer relax along
the shores of someone's aquatic core;
for quite some time, in truth I doubt I
can wade throughout his mystifying depths
of unfound treasures, and skeleton ships...
Where substance holds a new sense,
not only felt by skin."

This was by far my favorite stanza and it is one killer on an opening immediately grabbing anyone's attention and keeping it till the poem is over and then they have to read it again. Your imagery in this stanza is amazing and also the metaphors you use were creative and went really well together.

Well, I guess it is time to rap this up but I still am amazed with this piece and just like Britt that first stanza really says it all for me and it keeps me so alive and sad as I think about your meaning behind those words. Your emotions were told well in this poem and I could feel them dripping from your lines. Anyway, before I go on forever and ever, I would just like to say that your talent is so amazing and I am I so glad I get to see it and read it! Great job and keep writing!

Beautiful and sad at the same time

Makes me wish I could spell genuis