I adore this. Really well written and I like the build up from beginning to end. It sounds sad and like there's a little bit of frustration there but I could sense the deep feelings amongst the anguish. Brilliant.

Danika

I think this piece would be better if you put it into a form like a cinquain or a rictameter. But I felt your pain very deeply in this piece. Your words speak what you're trying to hide inside. Great work dear and I loved the title. Keep it up. -Nik

Sweet action, good and true poem. any one could relate, cause every one has loved and loss. a 5/5 for sure. keep writting, and I'll keep reading.

From the PoetryKnight

Wow wow wow i loved it very fantasticly done very well and greatly done and writtin,,,everything was great just wonderful,magnificint :) 5/5

I agree with the others as well :)