Wow! what exactly could that mean?
I'll tell you this right now my friend,
It'd be a physicists wet dream.
^^ This was hilarious. I just wanted to state that lol..
Wow, when I meant I wanted you to expand the first poem, I didn't mean this long haha. BUT....this was INCREDIBLE! and I have the dear that since its so long, a lot of people wont read and might get confused. I read every stanza down to the end and it was such a good piece! This almost needs to be in the religion section of poetry.
The way you repeated infinity, gravity, the weight, with the Omega, I just loved it!!
I'm not sure what to comment on becuase I could keep rambling, there were just a few spelling errors, but other than that this was "cute" in the beginning, very interesting throughout, and very deep ending!
GOod job!
Existence is a bead of light
Relative in size.
As tiny as it is infinite,
And we are all inside...
I really liked your words here. Well written bro.
12 years ago
by Darren
Wow, this was long!!
Those scientists searching for the meaning of life should just pick up a bible. I like the fact you write in a talking rather than the written word style. People do not talk like the written word. It sounds unnatural, because your poems speak as dialogue it works for me,
example,
It'ed be a physicists wet dream.
Totally bad english if written word, however as spoken makes perfect sense.
(funny how this line stands out!!)
Is the object of this poem to explain away theories? Infinite matter, black holes, gravity. The circle of mobius (the mobius strip)
Or is this one in the eye for the scientists.
thanks for the read.
I gave it 4/5 purely because there were a couple of spelling mistakes and a few stray capitols.