Don't Tell Me

Good job...i really liked the last three stanza's...they were beautiful...my only advice is that the first stanza was just a bit too literal, but overall good job!

How do you write these powerful and vivid
writes to make my imagination run wild! I really liked this one...another excellent read!!

I'm glad to see you're writing a ton of love poems lately (I'll take credit for that inspiration :p) haha

The first three stanzas were pretty good, but definitely not your best. You did redeem yourself though with the last stanza that I thought was completely perfect to sum up the meaning of love.

That fact that you can wake up and see a smile and be entirely happy just with that, when that makes everything worth it.

"Don't tell me you
aren't my world--
if not this was all in vain."

Not sure I have anything to say about this, who could disagree?

Once again as always you've written a piece deserving of a 5/5 Atleast I know you never sacrifice your talent to save time. Give it everything you have and don't try and be one of these fools writing to win the weekly poetry contests. Well done as always :)

That's what I usually call, a perfect poem :), that I find no words worth to praise it!

Excellent, way, of achieving perfection!

5/5 'course five

Don't tell me you
aren't my world--
if not this was all in vain.

^
If this was the only stanza you wrote, I'd still think it was an amazing poem. That's how that last part impacted me. Definitely the best part of the whole poem, but the rest of the poem was amazing also. :]

Great job!

Cayce