Rain

A beautiful poem about life and you have integrated nature so well into the piece.
I agree.. Something has to be done about the mistakes of society - we are killing our beautiful Planet Earth.

Just a few things
5th line down - I thibk yoy would want a capital for 'let'
^^ not a biggie just thought you might like to know..

Also the flow is a little off at the bottom - this is due to the longer lines you have used - you may want to break them up or reword them to restore the flow.

Otherwise a pretty good poem.

4/5

The repetition sounds good but perhaps divide the poem into stanzas. As i was reading, i found myself getting lost through the lines. And perhaps add a little bit more to the sentence : let the sun decide
Let nature rule.
and change mind to course
Let the waives change their course instead of mind.

I just added a few changes but they don't have to be taken much into account since your poem is nice the way it is. :)

Let the rain wash away the tears

Let the clouds lead me home

Let the stars shine in the sadness

Let the moon set new goals

Let the sun decide (its appearance)

Let the snow cool the tempers

Let the hail crash down on anger

Let the waves change (their course)


Let the soil make promises

Let the rocks break them

Let the grass cover the evil
Let the trees watch over us


Let the birds sing loud songs

Let the cats and the turtles, all creatures get along

Let the world before technology restore the peace

Let nature rule (before us.)


Let the sounds and the sights of the wilderness show us true paradise

Let the rain wash away all the tears, all the mistakes, all the years.

The repetition sounds good but perhaps divide the poem into stanzas. As i was reading, i found myself getting lost through the lines. And perhaps add a little bit more to the sentence : let the sun decide
Let nature rule.
and change mind to course
Let the waives change their course instead of mind.

I just added a few changes but they don't have to be taken much into account since your poem is nice the way it is. :)

Let the rain wash away the tears

Let the clouds lead me home

Let the stars shine in the sadness

Let the moon set new goals

Let the sun decide (its appearance)

Let the snow cool the tempers

Let the hail crash down on anger

Let the waves change (their course)


Let the soil make promises

Let the rocks break them

Let the grass cover the evil
Let the trees watch over us


Let the birds sing loud songs

Let the cats and the turtles, all creatures get along

Let the world before technology restore the peace

Let nature rule (before us.)


Let the sounds and the sights of the wilderness show us true paradise

Let the rain wash away all the tears, all the mistakes, all the years.

Nice write..
I like the way you used repetition throughout the poem was very effective... I like the first part
Let the rain wash away the tears :)